One of the best songs I've heard on newgrounds *so far*.
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#1 It was waaay too long the first part was pretty cool but it was just the same thing over and over.
#2 The drum beat in the background should change a bit because for about four minutes it is the loudest thing and the most repetitive thing, so either make it softer or change it up, you also went back to that at the end so that made me a bit frustrated.
#3 this isn't really a techno song it's like relaxed industrial.
thanks for your comments - ill take them on board for future tracks, esp the variety bit
i do tend to make overly long tracks as thats what i like
In the begining it was good but I felt myself listening almost more to the drums than to the melody and I had to concentrate on the melody to hear it, you want the melody to be the main thing that a person hears without them trying
at 2:20 i felt that the song lost all connection to the begining except for the melody, so it felt almost like a new song. here it is way to different instrument wise I like the idea of the guitar like that but keep some of the other instruments the same or make the plucked instrument at the begining do something different in the end.
the song started off as the "female samurai" but ended like some sort of futuristic soldier.
This song is a story about her life, as a transition from a young girl to a warrior. Thus why the song changes so much. The melody is able to be recognized at the end so you know it's the same person, but everything else is changed about it so that you know she has changed as well.
As for you listening to the drums more so than the melody, I don't really know how to respond to that, since I only used about 3 different loops throughout the whole song with a couple extra kicks thrown in.
for future reference The plucked instrument you are talking about is called a koto.
Thanks for the feedback!
sigh nice siiiigh (order of what I said to myself)
first off at :38 your playing get a little laggy. I love the malody at :51. good transitions. at 1:25 it sounded just like you were trying too hard to find something to fit into that spot, and tomeit didn't pay off. next did not like the drums in this especially at the end were you could really hear them. and lastly the voices... The voices at the beginning gave absolutly nothing to this piece. I expected it to get all like you dark king song but it stayed almost the same, and the voices at the end I just didn't like.
I ahve to agree with Therm0
There are times when the song just abruptly speeds up then goes back to how it was. (hate to be a broken record but pretty repetative). like I listened to it twice so much to the point that I had to look and see if if it had actually restarted. could have been better if you would have just made it like 1 min.
I think this was pretty awsome nice melody, wasn't super long, but just right (a little repetative but the lenght made it ok). the only issue I have with it (and this didn't go into how I rated it) was that when I saw dark king I thinking something that made me picture a dark stormy castle with like the skeloton of a king still sitting in the throne, but I got like an over cast day with like a killer clown on the loose. still it was a pretty good song.
Not your best
First off if you put loop on the title of this song because it is pretty much the same thing repeating then ignore what I have to say. like I said above this song never changes, it is just the same thing over and over again. sure it has a catchy beat but now that I have heard it once I think that I will never listen to it again because I find myself tired of that melody. at around :44 to around 1:20 the main part got really high and shrill and I didn't really like that. finaly the dissonance got old after a like the 10 time of the same notes.
I liked the basic song but i think that the entrance of the new melody at 1:06 was a little harsh, but I liked it when it happened at 2:10. also at the very end starting at around 3:00 it started doing that fade in fade out thing and I didn't think that really fit with the rest of the song.
as for the difference between the harshness at 1:06 and 2:10, the chords were simply set at a lower octave so the sound is literally less piercing. I wanted the chords to be harder, or harsher earlier on, and subtle later.
As for "around 3:00" if you are talking about how i brought the chords in again that was simply a crescendo. if you are talking about anything else im not exactly sure what you mean.
Thanks for the review, check back again!
I think that this is probably your best piece even out of your new ones
Good for u
You may be proud of it but it gets really boring after a while change it up a bit
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